Blog 64: A New Dawn

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Blog 64 Hello everybody, today we have a piece from Zachary Wright on Writing.com titled A New Dawn.     My brother and I are twins, I believe my name should have been his. As infants we were found by a deity named Halogi or The High Flame. Growing up we found out we had […]

Blog 63: The Abott Hotel

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Blog 63 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled The Abott Hotel by Violet on writing.com. Paragraph 1 My name is Tatiana, and I work as a receptionist at The Abbott Hotel. It was founded a few hundred years ago and remains one of the oldest operating hotels in the country, though you won’t find it […]

Blog #62: Peepshow

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Blog 62 Hello everybody, today we have a repeat offender with Andrea Craig and her piece Peepshow.     Paragraph 1 After the end of a long day in the San Aguado summer heat, the working men and women of Ridgeback liked nothing more than to spend their evenings in the various air-conditioned establishments all […]

BRONZE REBELLION BOOK REVIEW by L.C. Perry – ADVENTURESOME REVIEWS

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Blog #61: A Romantic Holiday in Paris

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Blog 61 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled a Romantic Holiday in Paris by Mira on writing.com. Paragraph 1 Once out of Paris Charles De Gaulle airport, Mira and Aleksi navigated the underground system to the centre of Paris. After checking in to their hotel and having a steamy shower, they made their […]

Blog #60: The Lady and the Thug Part 1

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Blog 60 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled The Lady and the Thug by RickyZ on Writing.com.       Paragraph 1 Richard raised his cigarette, gripping one end between his lips. Staring off down the dim streets, he fumbled about the interior of his hip box. It was easy to distinguish his […]

A Tale of Stars of Shadows by Lisa Cassidy—Adventuresome Reviews

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Blog 59: What A Ride

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Blog 59 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled What a Ride by Tina Stone on Writing.com       Kalob Montgomery heard the god awful noise approaching the house at an alarming speed. Maude must have heard it too because he heard a clatter of mason jars from the kitchen where she’d been […]

Blog 58: I get kissed by a pretty girl

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Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Today I get kissed by a pretty girl by Trenton Thomas Paragraph 1 The lava below me bubbles and pops as I fall. I guess you wanted to know what led to this? Well, you asked for it. This paragraph leaves me conflicted; the author chose a […]

“SWORD OF KAIGEN” by M.L. Wang – Adventuresome Reviews.

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Blog #57 : Not a Demon by Any means

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Blog 57 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Not a Monster, by any Means by Andrea Craig on Writing.com.       Paragraph 1&2 (combined because paragraph one is all of one word.)   “Ma’am?” The scruffy, bushy browed bartender poked at her shoulder with the end of a broom. Eileen hunched over […]

Blog #56 Broken Fate

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Blog 56 Hello Everybody, today we have a piece titled Broken Fate by Mr. Midnight on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 “Virtually no impact. No change.” The operations room was cold and so was her artificial voice.  There’s not much here to explore by way of opening paragraphs. The opening dialogue successfully conveys that something’s happening (which […]

Blog #55 Demons of My Heart

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Blog 55 Hello everybody, today we have a piece from AellaStormwind on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 I remember what it was like to live in a cage. I remember how it felt to be sold, used, beaten, and persecuted. I remember the last vestiges of my humanity fled from me and created the monster that they […]

Blog #54 With My Own Money

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Blog 54 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled With my Own Money by Thankful Sonali on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 Vishnu’s thin brown hands were trembling so much he could hardly count the coins. He dropped one, and it rolled under the bed. I have no general thoughts on this as an opening paragraph, […]

# Blog 53: A Third for Tea

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Blog 53 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled A Third for Tea by CrissMiss on Writing.com. Paragraph 1  “Daddy, who is Jesus?” Cindy asked as she got ready for their weekly tea party. As opening paragraphs go there’s not much to discuss here. It inserts the readers directly into the story while indicating […]