Blog 59 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled What a Ride by Tina Stone on Writing.com Kalob Montgomery heard the god awful noise approaching the house at an alarming speed. Maude must have heard it too because he heard a clatter of mason jars from the kitchen where she’d been […]
Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Today I get kissed by a pretty girl by Trenton Thomas Paragraph 1 The lava below me bubbles and pops as I fall. I guess you wanted to know what led to this? Well, you asked for it. This paragraph leaves me conflicted; the author chose a […]
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Blog 57 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Not a Monster, by any Means by Andrea Craig on Writing.com. Paragraph 1&2 (combined because paragraph one is all of one word.) “Ma’am?” The scruffy, bushy browed bartender poked at her shoulder with the end of a broom. Eileen hunched over […]
Blog 56 Hello Everybody, today we have a piece titled Broken Fate by Mr. Midnight on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 “Virtually no impact. No change.” The operations room was cold and so was her artificial voice. There’s not much here to explore by way of opening paragraphs. The opening dialogue successfully conveys that something’s happening (which […]
Blog 55 Hello everybody, today we have a piece from AellaStormwind on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 I remember what it was like to live in a cage. I remember how it felt to be sold, used, beaten, and persecuted. I remember the last vestiges of my humanity fled from me and created the monster that they […]
Blog 54 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled With my Own Money by Thankful Sonali on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 Vishnu’s thin brown hands were trembling so much he could hardly count the coins. He dropped one, and it rolled under the bed. I have no general thoughts on this as an opening paragraph, […]
Blog 53 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled A Third for Tea by CrissMiss on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 “Daddy, who is Jesus?” Cindy asked as she got ready for their weekly tea party. As opening paragraphs go there’s not much to discuss here. It inserts the readers directly into the story while indicating […]
Blog 52 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Lone Wolf by Robert Edward Baker. Paragraph 1 Marta clenched her fists and tramped across the dusty parking lot toward Fallen Angels Bar. Nobody from out of town would know this shack was a bar since the sign blew away in a storm three years […]
Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled The Great Escape Part 1 by Lady H on Writing.com. Paragraph 1 I hesitate, left leg resting over the ledge of my windowsill, the other planted on the carpeted floor of my bedroom. A gentle summer breeze ripples the edge of my short emerald dress, teasing and […]
Blog 50 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled You Talk of Freedom by Rebecca Sykes on Writing.com, I’m sure it will involve furiously supporting the global enslavement of the human race to mice overlords. Paragraph 1 Rushing down the stairs, Mia checked her phone. She’d been waiting for the philosophical debate on Freedom […]
Blog 49 Hello everybody, today we have a semi-nameless piece titled The First Part of My Thriller Piece by Leo Saint Thomas on Writing.com. I’m sure it will include a thrilling sermon. Paragraph 1 My eyes fixated on the life-less figure in front of me, I carefully climbed up the porch steps. I needed to […]
Blog 48 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Run Away by chantelle on Writing.com, so I hope you’re ready to exercise. Paragraph 1 “Run..” Gonna be honest with yall, there’s not much to work with here. The ‘run’ does indicate a sense of desperation and […]
Blog 47 Hello everybody, today we have a piece titled Forget Me Not by Aussie1 on Writing.com, I’m sure it will include much tragedy about flowers forgetting to not forget themselves. Paragraph 1 Standing in the Florist shop, I looked at the young bright-eyed assistant, Joan, serving the gentleman before me. Her sparkling manner made […]
Blog 46 Hello everybody. Today we have a piece titled the Cruise Ship from iscjohn on Writing.com, an independent author. This is a work in progress and should not be viewed as a finished product. Paragraph 1 Carl Dunaway was standing on the deck of the huge ocean liner having a smoke and minding his […]